Riley is already very well developed, and her conflict with Burt is far more important to the story than the little moments with Tardust. Was he really important enough to warrant a lengthy, heavy-hand back and forth between him and Riley to get to the important bits? Riley likely would have killed him for whatever reason. She's off the deep end, no? Feels like the right move for the story to push through the parts that don't matter, and get to quicken the pace towards the end.


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