Loopholes & Inconsistencies

[Kc]

If this story-line were edited from the beginning, I would recommend making Michael an E7 or an E6(P) as opposed to an E5. As a "hard charger" it is not implausible that a 35F could be a SFC in 9 or 10 years (assuming he enlisted at 17 or 18). This would make it much easier to see him as the dominant leader in the group over Angel--he would have experience, age, and rank and would probably have the contact with field grade officers that would support his relationship with the Colonel. The first chapter says that Saul, if he kept his mouth shut, would likely outrank Michael--this would have to be changed to support Michael's new rank.

That would have rivaled Burt's rank... and I wouldn't have wanted to do that. I also feel that E-5's have a much different mentality and age, and better fit for what I wanted. He's an e-6 in Irwin though...

Angel is described as a "spoiled kid", but his family ties seem that he might be a gypsy or a member of a non-privileged group.

He still had $ and came from $. Legit $, that's another story.

Bell, CA reserve center does not seem to have a unit that supports all of the character's military specialties. Could be from the MP BN with SGT Cross filling the 35F E4 position and Saul reclassing to MP with Angel slotted as a non-MTOE detachment executive officer to get him "command time" outside of his public affairs detachment.

Yeah, I sort of created a unit for them... It's a non-specific unit for a few reasons. If I chose something specific, then there might have been some story ghosting issues. Like if I based it off of a unit that exists, there would be a lot more strings to tie down.

General feedback: Season 1 was good story-wise but was very weak production-wise. Season two was decent in both respects with season 3 being excellent in both respects (voice acting improves a lot over the 3 seasons, use of sound effects, story editing, and the plot).
I have not begun Season 4, but if you intend to continue to work on the series post-production, I recommend doing some heavy editing to season 1 as it does not meet the season 2 or the season 3 standard.

Well, we got better as we went that's for sure, but you have to start somewhere. We went back and remastered Season 1 and it's much better on CD than the podcast form. So if you listen to the podcast version, I recommend going back and doing the other version.


OK, now for something new entirely. I'm finally going to fix the extra "PUCK" in Chapter 24.

For those of you who don't know, I made a pretty big mistake from season 2 to 3. I originally had a guy named "Puck" as a maller. He liked Hockey, that's where his nickname came from.

Anyway, at that point season 3 was still in outlining and planning phases and I ended up changing a character named "Pike" to "Puck". SO, what happened? I ended up with two Pucks... oops. Big oops. It's been driving me nuts. So, in the next few months it's going to get fixed and changed. I'll keep you updated on when, it'll take some time, but the name will now be "Biscuit". The funny thing about that... Biscuit is a nickname for Puck. It'll clear up the confusion and yet still remain the same.