Alright here goes, I might be a bit late on my other chapter.

16:40 -- Slight pause when speaking, not sure if it's intentional

17:35 -- Kimmit (actually no idea how to spell his name) gets louder, could be toned down just a bit.

23:35/40 -- Minor popping in the background.

40:00 -- Squeaking from what I assume is boots gets a bit annoying, could consider turning it down or taking some out.

42:10 -- Slight audio cut from transition between parts, could be smoothed out a bit.

53:27 -- Slight rattling in BG right after Angel dies. Not sure what it's supposed to be or if it's intentional.

Thats all I got, hope I didn't miss much.